The more I sit with this experiment the more opportunities and ways I can frame it appear. I think that the addition of the email at the top is a good way to focus it. I found it uncomfortable to write at the beginning, but it got better the further in I got. I think the timestamps and adding an introduction is a good thing, however I definitely struggled with finding the correct length of introduction and it might need to be abbreviated if I worked with the project again. I was overwhelmed with the amount of feedback I got from peer review last Thursday. It was all extremely helpful, but there was so much to consider and alter within 4-5 days. I really enjoyed hearing everyone’s perspective, as everyone comes from different backgrounds as writers, so they gave me different tips or things to focus on. I am also still unsure if my theme/goal is a bit weak. I think it might be, but I don’t know how much big-picture commentary I want to provoke. I could discuss differences in SES, opportunities for safety and information networks between my coworkers and I. It is a bit unclear to me right now. I also think that when I do this as my final project, it will probably need some common threads connecting the piece. I could use some different literary devices or something and repeat the cleaning in Carter, especially the dining room table, as a representation of the only control I felt I had in the situation, and to build on SES differences at the job describe how I wasn’t really cleaning anything before this, but then it became a primary task for me. In doing a discussion of the differences between my coworkers and I, a lot of the things like network, education, etc. are all protective factors in sociology and public health could be shown to become starker throughout the piece. In terms of wealth and educational differences and the luxury to quit if I wanted to, I could expand on that in terms of conversations with my parents and some of their career expertise (this was brought up by a couple of my classmates that I could explore this more). At work I have tried to be intentional about when and how I mention that I have family in the medical field and would need to be careful while writing this too. I think that overall I am satisfied with this sample of the experiment but would need to be really careful and focused in the upcoming sections.